Insight
Posted by Soumya Agarwal on October 1, 2010
Am I blind to see what is happening to me?
I am locked up
I am knocked up
I am all beaten down
Ooooppppssss…….
I am 5 feet underground
The workload gets on the top
I have become slave of a clock
I scream and tell it to stop
Messy people, comes and goes,
Feelings to be with friends have arose
I try to lead those shattered dreams
I have messed life’s melody themes
Except friends everything else is composed
Now a cluttered life me owes
My dark black eyes are watching me
My soul roams in the fog
I, with myself cannot get along
I try to talk with my younger scenes
But now they have started to scream
Slowly I began to realise
The darker side is chasing me
I look deep into my soul
Try to find the hidden me
Not within this dark soul
I initiated to stroll
Happening to hate self-control
Whatever is going, will this ever stop?
I must leave
And Try find mental peace
My pains will decrease
I don’t need a key to unlock this door,
I’m going to break down these virtual walls,
And jump into Niagara falls
So here I get up and leave,
An idea I have conceived
Now, I have achieved
The mental peace
I have lost the disbelieve
And I am all ready to celebrate Christmas eve.
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Nalini said
Merry Christmas!
Ambreesh said
Nice composition!!
Love you for the creation and your self-confidence!
Cheers!
DesiSoul said
You really have expressed the true feelings of all the working class and the pressure they have to put up with on daily basis. Once again, a very nice job and beautifully done too!
Request: I would like to see new posts more frequently!
XYZ said
something like this is obvious to a person’s writing( read poetry) after such an extended absence from it( i say absence because it was not visible to readers like me but if the process continued in some bedside notebook than kindly excuse me ), if he/ she is not a born poet.
well, the poem started with a question, which can be a bold experiment because questions are mostly raise at the end.kudos.subsequent paras were devoted for the answer of the question,which are beautifully crafted and able to invoke emotions in the reader(I am 5 feet underground,I try to talk with my younger scenes etc.) but the next question is little abrupt and the fallowing lines are also little vague. it gives an impression to be a different poem.link.
though i have also read some of your earlier poems, and observed it maturing with time, both in style and substance,totally from an outsiders perspective. expect ions are more because i have seen the spark of brilliance and believe that you have more than enough in you to convert such spark in to blazing flame of fire given you believe in yourself and work consciously towards it.good luck.
“The darker side is chasing me” but remember chase me catch no body.
Meow said
I understand it Mini. I know for longer than ever. The poem says all. Beaking and screaming is not gonna work. We live in a dreamworld Mini. Be calm.
Sachin Verma said
Osho said – Lose the mind and gain consciousness and you are mature. Die to the past and be born to the present and you are mature. Maturity is living in the present, fully alert and aware of all the beauty and the splendor of existence.
Be less of a judge and you will be surprised that when you become a witness and you don’t judge yourself, you stop judging others too. And that makes you more human, more compassionate, more understanding